Fairytale Ending (sequal to Draco Cries)

[wendeleen.livejournal.com]

So this is kind of the equal to Draco Cries. Plz comment. I'm still rather new to all of this.

http://www.foreverfandom.net/viewstory.php?sid=16829

Comments

[animeartistjo.livejournal.com]

You write a good tragedy, but the cause of the angst sort of... well, not in character with Harry. He's not so lazy and trivial as that--but maybe that's how you wanted it, or couldn't think of anything else... Other than that, I like it.

You might want to go over the story again, though. There are no outstanding errors that detracts from the story's plot, but the numerous, little misspellings and missing punctuation are annoying. Although your story is very poignant, the many technical errors make it look bad. Just take a minute or so to proofread.

Don't take me the wrong way; I liked your story. I'm only offering advice to make it better.
In addition, I suggest you change the link to foreverfandom. People lazier than I might not bother to check the comments if the link failed in the first place.

[wendeleen.livejournal.com]

I guess I do prefer OOC Harry. I don't really like the Harry that is potrayed by JKR. English is actually my second language and I'm pretty new at this so I do really appreciates every comment and criticism that's given.
Thank you.