It's quite good, though it does seem to lack closure, a bit. I mean, there is closure, but I don't get the 'oomph' from it that I could. I'd reccommend either turning it into a series or adding another line or two--even if the line just says Harry smirked or something--because I'm about 99% certain that that would bump it up from 'quite good' to 'must read'.
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Date: 2004-01-30 01:16 pm (UTC)X.
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