My first FF...

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Hello! This is my first story here and it's very short. I hope you like it...

Title: A dream
Dracos POV
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Sad
Thanks to my great beta snuffy_supreme! :)




I can see it clearly... How you had extended your hand and how I had taken it hesitantly. "We don't are enemies anymore." These were your words. You had smiled, so warm and friendly, it simply took my breath away. I remember our first kiss. The feeling of your gentle lips was overwhelming. I will never forget it. You were the only one who could make me happy, you could give me the things I've always searched for. Love, affection, security...

I long for the time when we first made love together. All these feelings I had when you took me. First, I was a little bit nervous and unsure, but you helped me to conquer my small doubts. And then it was wonderful and pure and lovely...

I love how it feels to lie in bed with you, cuddle with you, kiss you... The look on your sleeping face early in the morning is so cute. I love it when we have breakfast together. Isn't it great that we have our own house now? To be with you every night and every day is unbelievable and wonderful. Two lovers, together forever...

... And then I wake up and reality comes back. And I know again that my first kiss wasn't with you, it was with Pansy Parkinson. And that I had my first sex with a minor death eater and it was everything, but neither good nor gently. And also that I will never see your face again because I'm sitting here in Azkaban and the Dementors can't wait to have their fun with me... Maybe this was my last peaceful dream and I will not forget it. My happy past with you, Harry Potter, was just an illusion. But now that's all I have...

End

Comments

[cryforthemoon.livejournal.com]

I read this while listening to a really sad song, and it really works. I liked this, but it's slightly vague at times. Maybe that's just me, and it is supposed to be a dream, right?

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Yes, that's right. But it also can have to do with my limited english knowledge. I will try to do better in my next ff. Nevertheless thank you for the comment. *hug* :)

[silverness185.livejournal.com]

I really liked this, and I didn't even realize you had limited english knowledge until you mentioned it. Good job! ^.^

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Thank you, I'm so happy about the good reactions. First I was very unsure if I should post it, but now I'm happy about it. ^^

[enchanted-jae.livejournal.com]

This says so much in such a short piece. It's beautiful.

If I may, your line "We don't are enemies anymore" should probably be "We aren't enemies anymore". I admire your ability to write so well in English, considering it isn't your primary language!

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much. :)

*schnüff*

[(Anonymous)]

yeah! It's a great story! So sad. I nearly must cry about it. And yes, I know the other one! Go your way. And never give up writing storys;)

Re: *schnüff*

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! :) *cuddle*

[out-fox.livejournal.com]

Must you rip my heart out with suffering!Draco? Which means I liked it, lots of emotion but effective in such a short piece. yay you.

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :D *hug*

[ura-hd.livejournal.com]

nice

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Thanks. ^^

[(Anonymous)]

so sad and bittersweet, i love it. too bad its not just a bit longer. :oP love it anyways.

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you like it. ^^

[chronoclockxvii.livejournal.com]

love it! so sad though. poor draco. *sniff*

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Thank you! *cuddle*

great *^*

[(Anonymous)]

oh my... when I finished the last paragraph I got goose pimples...

I really like the story although it's sad T^T

~*Sherry*~

Re: great *^*

[polaris-86.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you so much! :) I'm so happy that you like it!