FIC: When The Clocks Stopped

[vaysh]

It is my sincere pleasure to finally be able to post a fic of mine to this comm, as I usually write top!Draco. Do enjoy my forays into the Bottom!Draco Emporium. ♥

Title:When The Clocks Stopped
Author:vaysh11
Summary: A catastrophe has hit the world, wizarding and Muggle alike: all the clocks stopped, time has come to a halt. Harry Potter's curse-breaking team is part of the quickly formed Order of the Hummingbird. They need the expertise of the Time Master who is none other than Draco Malfoy.
Rating: NC17
Length: 31,000 words
Pairing(s): Harry/Draco
Theme(s): time travel, alternative time-lines, memory loss, old school Harry/Draco dynamic
Warnings/Switching? no switching, slightly dub-con, canon character death

Comments

[dadomz.livejournal.com]

This was absolutely brilliant. I'm a bit disappointed that I was in a huge (mandatory) rush to read it (I had to visit someone at the hospital) hence the cursory response. Let me read this again when I get back and re-comment. Or, I'll send you an email. :)

[vaysh]

Dadomz! I am thrilled beyond words that you like this story of mine. *hugs*

[dadomz.livejournal.com]

Ah there, I am now able to give you my thoughts.

First off, you have a way with words; it seems like no single word is out of place. I'm very much smitten with how each sentence is constructed and how each word rolls off my tongue fluidly. Your choice of words complement the entire story. They allow me to imagine vividly and evocatively, enabling me to experience the story the very same way the characters do--the very same way you do as an author. To me, that's of utmost importance--allowing me to relate with your work, with your characters, even if they're all figments of our imagination.

Moving on, the premise of the story is very intriguing. You devoted enough time to build the interest of your readers.

[dadomz.livejournal.com]

I've concocted theories in my head, piecing things together before you allowed it to unfold.

I liked how you depicted Hermione, surprisingly. Of all the characters, her brief presence haunted me and made me relate more to her. She seemed almost human--too human and let's face it, with the way Rowling portrayed her in the books, you never would've thought of her that way. She was quite smart--smartest even, she was beautiful, and she had the best lines! Haha.

That said, I liked the theory of time travel--I've always been fascinated by Time Travel and I've Wells to blame. I liked how you likened it to the speed of light--I'm a sucker for anything scientific and philosophic.

Also, correct me if I'm mistaken but this was one of the most well-written omniscient pov I've ever read.

Other than that, my only complaint? It was too subtle and the plot line was so powerful that I almost missed the relationship between Harry and Draco. Of course, we can take that as a good thing. :)

[vaysh]

I love to hear that this story made you "concoct" theories, just like Harry and the Order did. You can probably tell, I am coming from the mystery genre - always wanting to get the reader to guess and thus involve him or her into the story line. ;)

This Hermione, tbh, came out of nowhere. I was surprised about her as much as you are. You are quite right, Rowling never really gives her chance to be human, as if girls who are that intelligent somehow lose their ability to feel. I am glad I managed to convey for you a convincing and full grown-up Hermione.

The bloody science in this was the hardest. For a couple of days there, when I was writing the story, I even got a tenuous grasp on how the Large Hadron Collider works. I've forgotten it all by now, of course. :)

Correcting you, my sweet: Harry is a close third-person narrator. All the longer parts are written from his pov. There are instances of omniscient pov in the smaller pieces, but essentially I tried to stick with the pov of the central character of those, that is Wilhelmina, Sirius, Molly Weasley, Zak, Bill, Draco, etc. I am not sure, but we may be using different definitions of what pov means. I don't think omniscient pov works for longer piece of fiction anymore - it's way too outdated and doesn't get the readers involved the way I want them to be involved.

This story has major plot problems, imo. Like the Hermione plot line is set up with a whole lot of emotional investment that is never followed through. Too much plot and backstory. It's always the death of me. :)

Thanks for this, Dadomz!

[vaysh]

My darling, really, this is such a wonderful comment. Thank you for taking the time to write this is all up. Be assured, it is highly appreciated. And awwwww! Thank you so much for all the nice and very kind things you say about my writing. Words are important to me, and I am always learning more to use them to achieve what you described - enabling me to experience the story the very same way the characters do- . If I managed that, I am very, very happy.