Constructive Critiques Please?

[fckyeahwizangst.livejournal.com]

 Hello, guys!
I was wondering if I can get some people with some time on their hands today to seriously review my work. Any sort of help on improvements is always appreciated but, be warned, it's a dark and often times disturbing fic.

Title: Malfoy Manor is Not Haunted
Author: Lady Vonne/ fckyeahwizangst
Word Count: 14 197
Warnings: Abuse, Violence, Disturbing themes, Mental Illness
Summary: One-shot Dark!Fic. Lucius Malfoy is determined to fix his broken son, for the War has turned him against his own father and now he's infected with the plague that will be his downfall. Mental-illness!Lucius, Abused!Draco
Author Notes: I'm planing a sequel that I'd like to post after I get more feedback on the first part. Please, if you have time, I'd love for you to check it out. Thank you very, very much. Constructive criticism is always appreciated, as well!

www.fanfiction.net/s/6883412/1/Malfoy_Manor_is_Not_Haunted

Dubious Consent

[zoryatwist.livejournal.com]

Hey,

it's been a while, but I read some interesting stories in other fandoms that really made me want to see the plot in my favourite world.

I'm looking for Harry/Draco dub-con (wouldn't mind non-con either)
I guess Draco/OMC would be fine as well

Draco is forced to bottom for Harry, either because Harry is dark, or a spell forces them to do it, a bonding happened, .....or any other reason

I don't care whether he likes it, hates it, consents half heartedly or not at all

Strange request
but I hope there's stories like that out there

Thanks

threesome fic rec

[22muses.livejournal.com]

 Title: Towel Boy
Author: V for Viagra
Summary: HP/DM/BZ After years being tormented by the two sexiest Quidditch players in the league Draco finds out a secret about them that will change things forever. Not everything is as it seems. Sometimes cruelty hides dirty desires. Its a three-some kiddies!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6862447/1/Towel_Boy

in return, can anyone rec some good threesome fic with the above mentioned pairing. thnx! <3