WIP recs

[roneviacake.livejournal.com]

here are some WIP fics that I have been reading. Just thought I share them.

Title: Flirt
Author:xErised
Rating: T
Pairing: Harry/Draco
Wordcount:36,665
Summary: Draco finally decides to give Harry a set of rules and two months, nothing more and nothing less, to court him. But Harry had never expected it to be such a challenge... Post-Hogwarts. HP/DM
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5667456/1/Flirt

Title: An Angels Wrath
Author:RedOneTwoThree
Rating: M
Pairing: Harry/Draco
Wordcount: 16,914
Summary: When an 11 year old Draco shows up at godrics hallow with no memory of who or where he is the potter family must choose whether to help him or turn him in. slash! Full summary inside!
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5782031/1/An_Angels_Wrath

Comments

[zoryatwist.livejournal.com]

hey,
yeah that was me

my comment here was very general,
maybe a few examples might help?

1. the scent-thing, I mean it's possible to like how a person smells, but you may have gone a bit overboard with the whole thing, if you can follow a person's scent all over a room they used way to much cologne, people don't react as extremely as Harry does, seemingly basing a relationship attempt on it

2.the jealousy at the pool-thing, while i simply love your take on pureblood prudeness (it's extremely canon and original!) Harry's jumping to the conclusion that Draco was jealous is one of the lurches in the plotline, not realistic, just as Draco's sudden possesiveness is not realistic

3. the kissing the ex-thing, i loved the angst, but it was over way too quickly, without a real release for the tension you built up by having Harry kissing another man while wooing Draco, it's suddenly over and done with, no explanation, Draco is left standing in the cold, looking a bit like a wimp for simply giving in, and the whole incident stays in the readers mind, making Harry rather unlovable